Rédaction corrigés sur l'école à la maison

Home schooling : for or against ? Discuss in 200 words at least

Rédigez l’essai « Etes vous pour ou contre les études à la maison? »

 Utilisez des mots de liaisons comme nevertheless, unless etc,  développez avec  on the one hand, puis dans le second paragraphe on the other hand, faites une conclusion en donnant votre avis personnel.

 

Dans ce DM de seconde, les consignes sont claires, et font suite à un cours sur les mots de liaison

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Voici un exemple de réponse à ce sujet, d’un personne contre les études par correspondance :

 

D’abord, l’introduction, qui ne commence PAS par les mots donnés dans le sujet !

In the old days, schools didn’t exist and the rich kids were schooled at home. The poor ones, however, weren’t usually schooled at all. Nowadays, most school systems are criticized and more and more people tend to buy private tuitions or even home schooling. So is home schooling good or evil?

 

Ensuite, les 2 parties comme demandées dans les consignes:

 

On the one hand, it is sometimes necessary for kids to be schooled at home. [For example, some kids have diseases that prevent them from going to school because they might be endangered by being close to other kids. Some are high level sportsmen who cannot fit to regular school rythm. Some live abroad, in cities that do not have any school using their mother tongue. All of these use the CNED in France]. To be more general, the state school system is not always very adapted to every kid. Therefore, lots of parents buy additional lessons to help their children succeeding.

 

On the other hand, schooling kids at home should not be encouraged, apart from the cases quoted above. Indeed, school is a great place in many ways. First, it is one of the basis of democracy and equality: every kid deserves the same right to learn and to succeed. Second, it is the place where kids become socially adapted: they have to meet other kids, make friends or foes, etc. If a kid is schooled at home, it will probably be hard for him to have regular social relationships.

 

A la fin, 2 phrases de conclusion précisant l’opinion de l’auteur (que nous avions deviné au fur et à mesure de l’essay)

 

To conclude, I think that home schooling should be limited to those who practically cannot go to school. Apart from that, school is great and every kid should go there.

 

Les mots de liaison sont soulignés, un exemple est entre [ ] , les paragraphes sont bien délimités et on ne répond pas à la question dès la 2eme ligne !


Good Luck !

 

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